12/12/23:
- Lee, me and Alex look at Kelsey. Let the audience know we’re talking about Kelsey. We all care about Kelsey, all the way through.
- When on the bus move hand as little as possible, have a fixed point.
- Lee and me need to sit on chairs during Gaz scene, not on the floor.
- Say “With that she heads back into the world” after Gaz scene.
- Look at Mark scene, we need a signifier for him (empty seat?).
13/12/23:
- The narration texts feel flat and feel like they are still on the page. They need to be more energetic when being delivered.
- When Lee says ‘bad haircut’, clock it and react to it.
- Play a comic game when on the bus watching the phone. Clock and react to each other.
- When doing the transition after the boxing scene, pick up the energy and the urgency of it.
- During the daughter scene, everything was thrown away when I pulled the phone out so it’s better to go behind Kelsey rather than sit on the table, do it over her shoulder.
- Pause, let a scene finish before carrying on starfish.
- 3 voices doesn’t work for the voicemail at the end.
TECH RUN – 11/01/24:
- Be more open during mine and Kelsey’s scene.
- Speak to the audience more when narrating.
Caitlin Freestone-Deeming 